Post Workshop critique for Andrzej

After every workshop our attendees can send images from the workshop for a follow-up critique, this is Andrzej's selection from our November workshop with the RPS Digital Imaging Group

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Spot on, only objection is there should be a little catchlight in the eyes, he looks a little dead. You could crop this to 8x10 portrait format for a stronger image.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Brilliant. Nothing I would change about this at all.

On a hi-res image just have a check that there are no strong highlight spots in the top right hand corner.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Still very strong, though I'm not so convinced about the crop here. Dennis is sitting a little low in the frame so he's looking a bit truncated - I can see the problem - you wanted to get the whole of the baton in - difficult one. Probably you can't get a decent crop from this pose because everything is too far apart.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

It's quite good, my first impression was very positive, but on a second look I think the big problem is the flatness of the light across the back, a little rotation of the torso in the light would have brought out much more detail in the body structure.

Couple of details, not sure about the wrinkly elbows and the odd bulge on the left hand side by the elbow.

Overall the image makes poor old Sharon look very wide !! Should either be perfectly symmetrical or definitely to one side.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Nice, though maybe slightly dark. I can't give you a definitive recipe but I think you need to play more with different ways of getting to a monochrome, this looks a little soft and lacking in contrast.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Good composition, lovely curves - personally I like the hand, though others might object.

See comments above regards monochrome conversion.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Everything is "wrong" in standard judging terms about this image but I think it's great. Crop, hands, eyes, nose, all are technically wrong. But the whole proximity the edge of the frame along with the expression gives a very strong feel. Looks just slightly dark.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

This is such a tricky shot, getting just the right amount of face through the arms. Again its strong on first glance, but doesn't stand up to a long look. The arm separation is awkward, the camera position leaves to a very odd shaped neck being visible and the hair is blocked up yet we have a very bright armpit.

I think the fix would be a vertical light pointing downwards and careful framing and camera position through the arms.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Not sure what's happened here, it looks oddly flat. Difficult to tell on the smaller images but I think the light was too low down. Shame because it's good but no cigar.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

I really like the treatment on this image and the unusual crop - it all works very well.

Lots of details that add: the rim light on her back, the detail in the hair, the combination of hand and foot, the look on the face, the treatment, the crop, the reflection on the floor.

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Close, but compared to your other work this looks like a snap. On it's own it would be perfectly fine, and one a client would buy. Good light on the sparkly trousers, nice expression. Again hard to tell but I think the problem is in the lighting position and that it is just not quite the "decisive moment".

workshop problem monochrome camera treatment Simon Q. Walden, FilmPhotoAcademy.com, sqw, FilmPhoto, photography

Can't decide about this one, the relative warmth of the colours seems at odds with the rest of the image, see if cooling it down makes the image and the expression more in keeping. Might also go monochrome.

There is a lot of flat, well lit flesh pointing to camera here, for the mood that comes over it would have been better shot into the shadow side.

OVERALL:

Very strong set. Can't say better than that.

 
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